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In the second to last one, my only criticism would be to find a new word for soar. I think the repetition of "life" is purposeful, but "soar" doesn't.
I'd recommend spring, surge, sail, glide, or shoot up. Or, you could ditch the up as well and say something like ascend, hover, etc.
I can't find criticisms I thin worth making in the others though
I am impressed by this haiku collection, they are tough to write! Well for me anyway, so I applaud you. In addition to that complexity this is a beautiful piece that really delves into the wonders of life. The only thing I would say about this is that your punctuation in some spots is strange. Maybe go through it a second time for that (this one site owl at perdue is a great grammar source). Other than that nice work!
Happy Writing!